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独立写作题目

“Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Movies and television programs should present stories that good people should be rewarded and bad people should be punished.”

写作范文

“一”类型：

没有“选择(which)”，

没有“替代(rather than)”，

没有“比较(than; compared with)”。

Introduction

一步引入题目的核心：People’s worldview and values ← 避免依赖使用主动性的主语。are under the

influence of what the movies and TV programs show. Considering this influence,

which may be overwhelming, TV producers and film makers should use screenplays

in which bad people end up withbeing in a plight or the jail or with the loss of

wealth or love← 找到题目里宽泛概念对应的“下义词”。 and, good people, quite the contrary,

eventually have the happiness they deserve. ← 信息节奏比较快。

Body

First, child viewers and teenage viewers need the absolute righteousness.←

中心句：主要考虑了人群(“细化人群”是论证思路的套路之一)。中心句后一两句的展开解释 → The right view on the world forms

at a young age, and so does the wrong view, and once a view is shaped, it may

become stubborn. 总有一句(往往也仅有一句)是长句，用来陈述核心信息 → Since we certainly would not want

our children or teenagers to develop the wrong view, which could never be

reversed, we certainly want the TV and movies to promote the righteousness.

当下决定不举例子(正篇作文中，需要出现举例论证，但是不是每个段落、每个理由都要举例)，直接写另外一个人群的道理。In addition, adult

viewers also the righteousness. 复制前半部分的论证套路 → An adult may be losing his faith

in the system because he has probablyreceived or witnessed unfair treatment. The

faith needs to beretrieved. ← 关注“短句”的使用。 Such movies and TV restore the

confidence, making him see the world afresh and believe the world’s justice. ←

注意句子主语的多样性，以及句型的多样性。

If movies and TV depict the opposite case, there would be consequences. ←

中心句的关键技巧之一：笼统宽泛。接下来应对中心句里的核心内容(the opposite

case和consequences)展开陈述细节。其实可以跳过“讲道理”，直接“举例子” → Any individual has the tendency

to do misdeeds or even commit a crime, when the individual is informed that

justice is sometimes absent and penalties are avoidable. It is particularly

dangerous, if we acknowledge that humans have criminal genes. Meanwhile,

individuals may becomeapathetic about others, when they are told that rewards

are not thenecessary result of their kind heart or good character. →

举例进一步，从笼统例子到具体例子 → I have seen some British TV in which bad people escape from

the punishment and good people wind up with a loss, and I could not stop

worrying that the British people would receive the message of those stories and

either misconceive of the world as a flawed system that they can take advantage

of or lose their belief. By contrast, I am not bothered by such anxiety when I

watch American movies and Chinese TV, in which kind-hearted people always

deserve the best and malicious people always suffer.

Conclusion

写结尾段的技巧：Introduction改一改

Since people’s worldview and values are swayed by what is on TV or in

movies, those producers must be careful with what those productions show. It is

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